First I would like to say I loved the series but I wanted to point out an inconsistency in the series. In another you another me II you wrote
"Does this," Daniel's fingers went to his pierced earlobe, "count?"
"How old were you when you had it done?"
"Twenty-six."
"A bit old for teenage rebellion, too young for midlife crisis."
Then in part III you wrote "He was trying to remember how old Daniel had said he was when he'd had his ear pierced when he realized these photos showed Daniel had had both ears pierced, not just the one.
The colour photos on the next two pages were taken several years later judging from the way Daniel had filled out in the meantime. ... 1984, after my year at Oxford, I stayed in London. The ones on the dig were taken in Italy in 1987 or '88."
Jack did the math. Daniel was born in 1965 so he would have been only eighteen or nineteen when most of those photos taken and early twenties in the others. "
That has him having gotten his earring at 18 or 19 not the 26 he stated. Maybe I am wrong but that jumped out at me when I read it.
I know the version of AYAM II on Area 52 is inconsistent with AYAM III, by the time I wrote III I'd changed my mind about a few paragraphs of II and the version of II on my website is the revised version. I'd forgotten that Area 52 has the original version when I put the link to III on and didn't put a note/warning, whoops.
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Date: Thursday, 25 September 2008 03:31 (UTC)"Does this," Daniel's fingers went to his pierced earlobe, "count?"
"How old were you when you had it done?"
"Twenty-six."
"A bit old for teenage rebellion, too young for midlife crisis."
Then in part III you wrote "He was trying to remember how old Daniel had said he was when he'd had his ear pierced when he realized these photos showed Daniel had had both ears pierced, not just the one.
The colour photos on the next two pages were taken several years later judging from the way Daniel had filled out in the meantime. ... 1984, after my year at Oxford, I stayed in London. The ones on the dig were taken in Italy in 1987 or '88."
Jack did the math. Daniel was born in 1965 so he would have been only eighteen or nineteen when most of those photos taken and early twenties in the others. "
That has him having gotten his earring at 18 or 19 not the 26 he stated. Maybe I am wrong but that jumped out at me when I read it.
Re: another you another me feedback
Date: Thursday, 25 September 2008 14:17 (UTC)